Tuesday, March 12, 2024

Alan Winter 9 1/2

 Okay. I think I’ve taken most of your comments to heart. 

Darkened the interior screened in porch and outlined the leaves with ink  


Faded the pier. Darkened the wall and some shadows. Stronger values on the woman. 


Added detail to the ruins. Reworked the background cliffs. Did a little work on the foreground. 



4 comments:

  1. sjdMarch 13, 2024 at 9:50 AM

    Definitely you’ve improved the first two sketches. The window sketch is lovely. Fading out the pier and strengthening the foreground really helped the second sketch. Maybe that fire pit above her head could be faded out too. The third one is strong but the ruins need to be unified, maybe with some shadows, imo.

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  2. ekoMarch 17, 2024 at 9:43 AM

    I agree--darkening the window's interior is better. Really separates inside from out. And now, the pier doesn't steal focus. Better hierarchy in that sketch. I wonder if you added too much detail to the ruins in the last one. They seem a little separate from that lovely foreground.

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    1. AlanMarch 17, 2024 at 11:31 AM

      Maybe. I’ve a newer version and I’m closing the door on these three.

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  3. paoMarch 19, 2024 at 3:29 PM

    Darkening the window pane helped define the inside/outside. Maybe also darkening the area around that a bit. The bright white with ink around the windows on the green house seen too strong and move them from background to foreground. It works fine on the close tree branch, but it seems too decorative when it encircles all those little leaves. The beach sketch does look better with the lightening and darkening of values.

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