Small changes—yet, it's taken hours to imagine and sketch a person who is still not quite right. And then, something's happening where the paper around her won't take paint right. All in all, this takes the painting from a "masterpiece" to a "learning experience." Still, there are things I like and I'm happy with the memory.
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| Pont-Neuf, Having Just Missed the Train, 14" x 10" |
She looks fine, but she just looks lonely. Could you put in a couple of tiny figures on the other side of the tracks or down farther from her to give it a little more life? Paintwise, it looks great, but narrative wise, there just isn’t enough to draw your attention into the painting. Or you could put a hand reaching up from the tracks….
ReplyDeleteSo funny—the hand reaching up! Made me start imagining what Elaine T. could have done....narrative-wise.
DeleteIn an earlier version, I saw a single person’s head and shoulders in the lower right corner looking down the tracks. I liked that idea more than the single full figure.
ReplyDeleteNope, it's just distracting from the magnificent scene.
ReplyDeleteI think she is way to close and subtracts a bit from the extreme perspective. I would have put just a couple tiny people, maybe like Dan's W people way back where those pop machines are. Maybe interacting in some indecipherable way.
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